SoftTempest wrote:From the look of things, you won't need any luck, but you still have our wishes. Post a link to your project draft or demo so we can offer feedback and line up to pledge when you go live!
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SoftTempest wrote:Yes, count us in among your backers. Wish we could have put together a pro video (that's what's really hurting our campaign, because 75% of Kickstarter visitors base support decisions simply on the video, BEFORE they explore a project further)!
AleishaGore wrote:SoftTempest wrote:Here's our PREVIEW LINK and I'll definitely get you the link when it's live. (Which I hope will be Monday). https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/al ... n=41be1de9
Charles wrote:AleishaGore wrote:SoftTempest wrote:Here's our PREVIEW LINK and I'll definitely get you the link when it's live. (Which I hope will be Monday). https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/al ... n=41be1de9
I watched your project video on your draft Kickstarter page, tonight. Here is some feedback on it, from my perspective.
1. The video starts off very well. I like the music that plays at the beginning. It's upbeat. You come out the door, and begin talking, immediately engaging the viewer. By the 16 second mark of the video, your spiel is done. You have great lines, your heart is made of chocolate, and the rest of you is pure sex. You have a nice smile. I give you two big thumbs up. You have my full attention as a viewer, once you say that and then turn to walk away.
2. The camera immediately heads into the next room, the voice from inside emanating before the camera gets there. Phil's small bit part in this video is OK, but you've set a very high bar for those two gentlemen to strive for, as far as retaining the attention to the degree that you grabbed it, right off the bat. I like the car magnets idea, Tony's part ends around the 47 to 48 second mark. Phil is briefly animated, which is a small plus. I liked the quip about the journey down Kickstarter alley.
3. Jeanie does good. Her remark about Rico being in prison is humorous. She has a really nice laugh. She's very animated. It engages the eye very well. She's got a very vibrant personality. She's very outgoing. It is her sashaying, though, as she walks away, that is the visual coup de grâce.
4. From the 1:30 mark to the 1:12 mark, you've got the guy who makes the comment about the cheap date. It's OK, not a bad job, and it's humorous. His facial expressions are animated, which is a plus. It's a brief segment, so it only gains you so much mileage. Yet, again, look at what the viewer compares him to - Jeanie and her sashaying. Even still, my interest in the video and what is being presented to me remains intact.
5. At the 1:15 mark, Tabitha takes center stage. At 1:39, Monica enters the viewer's field of vision. Of the two of them, Tabitha retained my interest longer. Between the two of them, they dominated the camera until the 2:21 mark - at which point, I was feeling bored.
6. At the 2:22 mark, the whole gang begins to come back in front of the camera. That final segment was fine. It was OK. It wasn't bad. It was a nice, pleasant finish.
7. Overall, it's a good video. It's pretty darned solid. It's engaging. But, instead of the Monica that is wearing the short, sparking blue skirt in that project image, the viewer is treated to this other Monica. ACK!! I know that the draft project page mentions Monica kissing toads and going on horrible blind dates, but personally speaking, I think that showcasing a scene from a horrible blind date would have been vastly more likely to build and amp up the enthusiasm factor, than what the Tabitha-Monica segments of this project video accomplished from around the 1:15 mark to the 2:21 mark.
A horrible bind date doesn't tend to be a high note of somebody's personal life, but for a short video, it could actually end up being a decisively delicious segment to transition into that final gathering scene at the very end. Instead, my enthusiasm is treated to a firm bashing over the head with over a full minute of dullness.
8. The project has a great name. It will catch people's attention.
9. Your funding goal is sixty grand. That's a sizable chunk of dough. Heavy early momentum would go a long way towards reducing that burden.
It will be interesting to see how this project fares.
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