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Looking for feedback

Posted: Mon Jan 19, 2015 10:31 am
by Fpex
Hi there

I am a backer and creator from Belgium.

We are finishing a draft for a project on system that can track people indoor in order to see if an accident has happened or to determine what they do so that the house (or building) can do something about it. We find it cool as it does not need the person to carry or wear a phone, tag or similar.

The draft is almost ready and can be found here

https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/16 ... n=ea697e52

We are still in doubt if let it go live, as ore-campaign has been not so good so far, but we still love to receive feedback to see what we can improve or do about it.

Thanks for looking.

Cheers

Francesco

Re: Looking for feedback

Posted: Mon Jan 19, 2015 7:55 pm
by sbriggman
Wording: "Imagine your home knew and could adapt to where your family really is." Should be "Imagine if your"

I don't really like that slogan. "Where your family really is" seems odd.

Re: Looking for feedback

Posted: Mon Jan 19, 2015 8:03 pm
by Fpex
Mmmm ... I agree, if you have a suggestion let me know. I will try now to rephrase it in a better way.
Thanks a lot for looking!