Ray,
Your project page has MAJOR issues. It is in need of a complete revamp. Otherwise, your project is likely to crash and burn.
1. Your video is too short. But, that's the least of its problems. You're wearing a shirt, with a wet band of sweat/water around the neck. That looks terrible! It will be a visual turn-off for some.
2. You fidget. The guy in the chicken suit, I imagine him as fidgeting like that. Quit fidgeting. You did have a little hand animation going on, in the video, which was a plus, but not that initial swinging of the arms.
3. Re-shoot the video - but, in a different location. Go outside, and it will benefit from natural lighting and the visual interest that nature inherently contains. Otherwise, find a spot to video indoors, something with something of visual interest or something with visual texture. Relax on a plus couch, or in a comfort zone of some sort, to project more of a relaxed look. It depends upon what subliminal message that you want to send.
4. The coloring of your art is substantially deficient. The coloring is what kills the visual interest of it. It's the worst thing about the comic strip that I read.
5. The lettering of the comic strip is dreadful. It is part of what destroys the visual interest of your comic strip.
6. The writing and story aren't bad.
7. The art is OK. It's not fabulous, but it is imaginative.
8. In the video, you have some energy for your project. That's why your arms are swinging like that. Your project doesn't bore you, but I sense that the camera makes you a bit apprehensive. Forget that you are talking to complete strangers. You are talking to people whose interest in this kind of thing exceeds your own. That's why you should feel completely at ease. Don't be afraid to be animated, when discussing it, but simple fidgeting isn't the same thing. It's distracting, rather than engaging. If you were talking to a life long friend over dinner at a restaurant, somewhere, how would you discuss this project?
9. The very first project that I backed on Kickstarter, if memory serves me correctly, featured a a chicken guy. See this link:
https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/13 ... -god-belowSo, I like the chicken guy that you came up with. I'm part of your potential support base. But, look at the image below:
On your Facebook gallery, it's bigger. Except for the belt, from the waist down, his coloring looks pretty good. The dingy white of his feather area diminishes visual interest. Foghorn Leghorn is bright white. This guy should be, too. His red areas should be vivid red, like his shorts.His comb on his head is dull. Dull drains visual energy. Overall, this one character has a lot of visual potential, but that God-awful pink background does nothing for him.
