RWP wrote:Using this title I can make it to where the focus is more on the backers than this girl.
Well, congratulations! You just lost the majority of people who otherwise might have thought about backing your project.
Are you certain that you've thought this whole thing through?
Almost any concept is interesting, so at least some will likely be attracted to your project enough to pledge to support it. But, the rel challenge lies in the execution and marketing of the underlying concept. And, what is the underlying concept that you are tossing about?
Well, it keeps changing - which implies uncertainty.
Your draft project page states: "This project is going to be three things - Sweet, Simple, and Short! My goal is to make a special girl I know smile. That's it, I just want a smile."
That strikes me as absolute hogwash, and I think that you're going to have a hard time selling hogwash to the public at large.
If your grand objective was merely to make the girl smile, I suspect that there are countless different ways to accomplish that, without resorting to crowd funding.
You intend to drag her under the spotlight of the public eye. Not that that is always a bad thing, mind you, but once you drag her there, you can't put her back if things begin to run amok.
This whole project reeks to high Heaven of romance. Yet, you seek to assure everyone via those words of assurance that you just want a smile.
A smile? Ahem.
You don't need five hundred origami roses to make a girl smile, nor even a single live one. So, what gives?
You claim to like simplicity, yet you want a hundred and twenty-five bucks. Something's not quite kosher with your logic, kid. How simple is it to fold five hundred origami anything?
Your visual dividers suck - at least, they suck for this particular project.
Of course, for some strange reason, I keep thinking that this isn't just about a smile. Let's get some feedback from others, shall we? Anyone else reading this thread, do you think that it's just about a smile?
Even if it is just about a smile, why a smile? More so than that, though, why HER smile?
The smile is secondary to the fact that it's about her.
Or, is it about you? Is it about your feelings for her?
You did say it was about just wanting a smile.
Your draft project page states: "I want to make something unforgettable, something amazing for a girl."
You want something amazing - yet, you're only after a smile, so why does it have to be amazing? You want it to be unforgettable, yet it's only about a smile.
Hmmm.....What am I missing here, people?
The My Goals section of your project [age states: "My goal is to see her smile But there's more than just that! My goal is to raise $125 so I have efficient funds to create many different types of roses."
More to it than just the smile, huh? It's about efficient funds to create many different types of roses, apparently. What the Hell?!
Kid, I think that she has you all messed up, inside, and I think that your approach borders on sheer lunacy. Your project, as stated, makes no sense, and I don't think that a crowd funded exercise in charades will achieve for you either your ultimate goal, whatever the Hell it really is.
You like the girl so much, that you're willing to crowd fund a smile for her. ACK!!! I don't know who the girl is, but I doubt that she's so patently obtuse that she can't see through incompetently crafted smoke and mirrors.