Hi, I'll give you some feedback.
I think it's detailed but perhaps too detailed. There's alot of text and you can't guarantee people will read it.
So for me, I'd add alot more photos. Perhaps photos of people playing the game, looking happy and enjoying themselves.
It's psychology really, backers can imagine themselves playing the game and enjoy it too.
In terms of "pitching" who have you connected with already? What have your closest competitors done? Perhaps base your campaign on successful ones.
If you need any further advice, feel free to get in touch.
CaribbeanConquest wrote:Hi all,
My project is Caribbean Conquest, a 3D MMORPG set in the Historic Age of Sail. Think: Ships. Pirates. Naval Combat.
We're a very dedicated team and will be launching our Project's Kickstarter soon, however I want your opinion on it! If anyone would please have a look at our Preview link and provide us with any tips that would be greatly appreciated.
Note: We do have a trailer in the works already
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Thank you!
Link:
https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/20 ... n=06079e0f