by lmatute » Thu Aug 29, 2013 6:05 pm
TheOrddl.
Here is my feedback, please don't take my feedback the wrong way, I am being 100% honest and by any means I want to play down your efforts and the quility of your work. (please also keep in mind english is my third language and sometime I come across on the wrong way).
Ok with that said, I see a very good issue with your project and it is very confusing. after watching the video and reading the campaing over and over I am still not sure what is your goal? what are you offering, It seen like you are offering "a Game" but no copy of the game is being offer as rewards. Later you can see that you guys are talking about Grand Turismo (however I am a gamer, that may not obvious to everyone looking at your campaign). Then it seen you are offering an "event" but that is not clear (at least not to me).
One mistake that I personally make a lot and I think it is what is happening here is that because you are your peers had been involved with the project for so long, everything make sense to you, everything seen to be obvious. However to those of us that are just joining and found your project on the kickstarter website or in a blog somewhere, the details of what you are doing are not that obvious.
I believe you need to have you or someone at the video explaining 2 Important points.
Number 1) Your background - Pretty much a short version of your "Are we any good at what we do?" section.
2) What are you planning to do with the funds. What is the hardware that you need or are thinking on getting and how that hardware will improve the participant experience.
Additional info like, who can participate, is it just for local people, Can I for example PArticipate from Atlanta, Ga?
Buton line, is you need to connect better with your "fans", make the campaign more personal, less than a marketing pitch and more, lets just all pitch in a make this better.
Hope this help.
Leo