Would read your campaign copywrite out loud. Lots of grammar/formatting errors I caught. Also, in the copywrite, I don't believe you have a breakdown of how funds will be used.
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I don't quite understand the logistics of this. How will you delver the canisters to the Mariana Trench/Everest? Something more specific in your write up would be helpful, as would a clearer breakdown of the need for 100K. I would also heed sbriggman's advice to proofread and edit your page. It makes your pitch look unprofessional and likely makes potential funders question your attention to detail.