spectrepaul wrote:Crickey I have updated further and will do more tomorrow. So far I have put more images in and the video you mentioned.
I see that. Excellent! Now, it's starting to make my eyes perk up and take notice, as I scroll down the page. The additional visual stimuli is good.
spectrepaul wrote:I will add the Facebook. Didn't realise because I put a link to my Paint Pot Facebook page so thought that was it.
Better late than never, as the saying goes.
spectrepaul wrote:Thanks for the feedback again, I can assure you though it is not half hearted measures as for example the explainer video is not just a vioceover, I actually redid the full video animation from scratch also.
Your video has no actual person in it. You lose something, that way, that human element that people relate to.
spectrepaul wrote:I will do something with my little image of me and I have also got the boxed Amiga software so will do new photos with bigger images, however the boxes are slightly faded due to age so will try to photo edit them.
Even if they are faded, they will carry more visual punch, if bigger.
spectrepaul wrote:Haha don't know how you found Tad the Toad on my old site Spectre Studios because I can't even find it and forgot about that!
Try this link:
http://web.archive.org/web/20040514173948/http://homepage.ntlworld.com/paul.harthen/spectrepaul wrote:Maybe in the section about the game I should start a story or something with characters explaining the app
Something tends to be better than nothing.
spectrepaul wrote:I am quite determined and really have put a lot of effort into this from last time its just a shame it doesn't seem to look like it.
Understood, but largely irrelevant. My interest in providing feedback is confined to trying to help you achieve a better chance of getting funded. If calling previous efforts half measures gets your attention enough to persuade you to try again, then it serves its purpose. Often times, project creators give up, before the clock run out. Many projects are successfully funded near the very end of their respective campaign cycles. If what you have isn't working, then keep changing things, keep adding things. In a nutshell, keep trying.
Your start is no worse than the start of many others. That said, it ain't over until it's over, until the proverbial fat lady sings. So, keep plugging away, refining your page and promoting your project.
spectrepaul wrote:I havent used my voice on the video as I have quite a broad Northern UK accent and people in the US would probably struggle to understand me.
Again, that misses the point. You don't have to narrate the entire video, but you should appear in it. Real people are infinitely more interesting than animations. Inter-splice real people into the animated portions. Mix it up a bit.
spectrepaul wrote:Further feedback welcome. Thanks
Go buy some fingerpaint, and have your kids to color you. Become one with the Paint Pot Force, young Paint Pot Padawan! Trust me - it will provide you a nice photo(s) that have lots of visual interest. Color your world, so that they will want to color their own - using Paint Pot.
The new project image, can you crop it so that the girl is centered? She is slightly off-center in that photograph.
If you get a group of people together, and you all smear paint on one another, it will create positive visual energy, and it will underscore the message that painting is fun. You can always wash it off, after the fact. Having a group sends a subliminal message that a sole individual in a photo can't send. Who wants to miss out on fun?
Also, I backed you. I don't do large pledges, but it did add another notch in your backer belt.