by sbriggman » Mon May 12, 2014 3:16 pm
I would break up the first paragraph into smaller paragraphs. The large block of text is intimidating. I also don't think you mentioned in the campaign text why you need $100,000 and where it will go. I know it's in the video.
"to.Season 2 is an open book,help us write it!. " - need to brush up on your spacing/formatting.
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