Horror card game preview page feedback
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    Horror card game preview page feedback

    by gregc » Mon Oct 19, 2015 2:58 pm

    Hi all, I was wondering if I could get some feedback on a preview page: http://kck.st/1Lk4jxB

    Obviously it's already got a to-do list associated with it:
    * Add music to main video.
    * Replace triangle bracket placeholders with the things they describe.
    * Get a better cover image at the proper ratio.
    * Get a better photo of the game.
    * Get a better art composite image.
    Most of those are underway, but I'm sure that there are things off that list that I should be attending to as well. I considered waiting until the page was finalised to ask for advice, but I suspect that'd risk putting myself in a category of "Asked for advice too late to implement any of it."

    Any suggestions?


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    Re: Horror card game preview page feedback

    by giftsandcoupons » Tue Oct 20, 2015 7:19 am

    Thanks for sharing. I think you've look at the details too finely for this. People don't notice those small factors.

    The thing they're looking for is:
    - Is this worthy of being backed, is it interesting enough
    - Do I trust this guy
    - Is it the right price
    - ...when can I get it.

    That's the basics really.

    My initial thoughts are the video image is too grey/black. It puts me off. Scrolling down the page, you mention £ GBP, I'd keep the currency general. You've got some nice images (sketches look great) but it's too wordy and perhaps not enough images to break up the text.

    There's no diagrams of timelines or shipments, nothing about your background as a person involved in problems...nothing about which sites have (or will) feature you...at the moment it's a bit bare-bones.

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    Re: Horror card game preview page feedback

    by gregc » Tue Oct 20, 2015 10:27 am

    Thanks for the feedback :)

    I'm sketching some ideas for a section on fulfilment and communication and have added dollar conversions where possible (literally can't do it to the pledge tier, but I think KS does the conversion automatically these days). There is a list of nine sites that will feature reviews of the game though, I'm not sure what else I could add to that.
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    Re: Horror card game preview page feedback

    by giftsandcoupons » Tue Oct 20, 2015 12:42 pm

    Which sites are you sending it to ? Does it include ours ? :roll: :?
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    Re: Horror card game preview page feedback

    by gregc » Tue Oct 20, 2015 2:17 pm

    I'd been targeting hobby gaming sites and geek sites, so yours didn't come up - but I'm happy if you want to write something about us. Drop me an email at greg@3dtotal.com and I'll happily send you a press pack full of pics and info or anything else that'd help out :)
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    Re: Horror card game preview page feedback

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    Re: Horror card game preview page feedback

    by yangyangmobile » Fri Oct 30, 2015 7:57 am

    The art is lovely. The campaign write up could use some work though, as I've seen some typos here and there. Otherwise, good job!
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    Re: Horror card game preview page feedback

    by MES Records » Sun Nov 01, 2015 7:37 pm

    yangyangmobile wrote:The art is lovely. The campaign write up could use some work though, as I've seen some typos here and there. Otherwise, good job!


    I agree with this. The game itself looks really cool but maybe you should let someone proof-read your campaign before launching it. The structure is fine but I noticed a few hiccups while reading through it. The first sentence is already kind of confusing:
    If you're looking at this at this point you're probably looking at it to help us build the project

    "at this at this" and the "at it" made me re-read everything for example.
    Other than that it looks good!
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    Re: Horror card game preview page feedback

    by gregc » Mon Nov 02, 2015 9:05 am

    Thanks for the feedback - though that preview page is now dead and the campaign is live:

    https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/82 ... -nightmare

    We're doing alright, £2600 in less than a week, but plenty of distance still to go!
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    Re: Horror card game preview page feedback

    by MES Records » Mon Nov 02, 2015 9:24 pm

    Hope you make it. Good luck!
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