by Charles » Sat Aug 02, 2014 11:19 pm
Your KickStarter page says, and I quote, " I have always been an artist and always will be! I want to use my work to make a difference in our world. "
Yet, your KickStarter page doesn't yield any evidence of that.
You have an artistic portfolio online, albeit a fairly small one, on your website. But, again, your KickStarter page isn't where any of your art is found.
But, your project page mentions it.
1 + 1 = 0
You have one big lump of text. Make that easier to chew, by breaking it into smaller paragraphs. People will be less apprehensive about sampling what you have to say, that way.
You're young. At a bare minimum, display your youth, put your youthful vigor on display. Remember that photography section of your online artistic portfolio? Yet, your KickStarter page is a visual desert, virtually bereft of visual life.
Your KickStarter page needs visual jumpstarting.